Hanna - Script to Movie - Part 2

Welcome back to Part 2 of my ‘Script to Movie’ Feature of Hanna.

In the first post, I analyzed the Black List Script of 2006. In today’s post I will analyze the structure of the movie and afterwards compare that to the script. Like in the first post I will use Black Snyder's Beat Sheet as described in Save the Cat!

First Image:

Hanna hunting a dear in the lonely nature of Sweden. Key dialogue: “I just missed your heart.”

Theme stated:

Min. 6

Eric: “We have all we need right here.”

Hanna: “It’s not enough. I’m ready.”

= Hanna wants more, although the world out there is out to get her

Set-Up:

Scenes in the cabin show us the ‘family life’ of Eric and Hanna. We see pictures of her mother Johanna. Then, next morning, fight training, memorizing information and shooting exercises. This set-up is very short, as we don't need very much information and more will be reveal

Catalyst:

Eric digs up a transmitter and gives Hanna the choice to activate it. Warning her if Marissa Wiegler ever found her, “she won’t stop until Hanna’s dead. Or she is.” = In this short sentence right at the beginning of the movie, the Goal was shown very clearly!

Read further after the break to see the changes made and read my verdict on the final movie!
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Hanna - Script to Movie - Part 1

 

Post based on the script ‘Hanna’ by Seth Lochhead.

Today I’ll be starting a new feature: In a first post I will read a script and analysis just as usual, but I’ll follow that up by a second post comparing the script to the final film. I’ll be writing about the structure (using Blake Synder's Beat Sheet) and discuss the changes made to the story

The Verdict:

I adore the clear and precise language, but the plot falls very flat, because the characters have no motivation or depth at all.

What’s it about:

A teenage girl, trained by her father to be the perfect killing machine, has to travel across Europe in order to make it home again.

First Image:

FADE IN:

EXT. FOREST - SWEDEN -- DAY

[...]

Hanna (14) glides through the trees, a bow strapped to her shoulders. Her camouflage causes her to fade in and out of the background. She floats through the trees as if she were a ghost.

[...]

Set-Up:

After the introduction to Hanna, the script cuts to Marissa, a stone cold secret service agent, who picks up a signal in Sweden and sends some men to capture Eric and Hanna. The next few scenes shows the “normal life” of Hanna: training, hunting, fighting until ---

Catalyst:

-- O'Reilly arrives at their cabin, capturing Eric and Hanna. Both escape from their confinement, but were hold in separate prisons. 


Read Act Two and Three after the break:

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Fahrenheit 451 (Remake) - Script Review

The Verdict: One of the best-written scripts I read, it offers a special-effects heavy update to the timeless classic, while being less subtle than Truffaut's film version.

What’s it about?
In an oppressive future, a fireman whose duty is to destroy all books begins to question his task. (Source: IMDb)

Plot Summary [SPOILERS]:

The first scene introduces us to the Fire Brigade: lead by Montag and Captain Beatty they search a house and soon find books, which is a major crime in this future. Relentlessly they burn the books and the house and arrest the family. 

We follow Montag on his way back home, when he meets Clarisse, the nine-year old neighbors’ girl, they talk and befriend each other. Back at home, Montag finds his wife, Millie passed out from an overdose of levelers. Medics come and resuscitate her, although the next morning she doesn’t remember a thing and doesn’t even want to talk about her apparent suicide attempt. Millie only wants to watch her interactive soap opera.

Back at the station, Captain Beatty tells Montag that soon he will be Captain of the Fire Brigade, before they leave for another emergency. They arrive at an old Victorian house and find thousand of books stashed away in the walls. The owner of the books, an old woman, chooses to die with her books and sets them on fire herself. Montag is shocked by the death of the woman: he can’t understand why would someone choose to die for something illegal? In the aftermath of her death, Montag finds two books and takes them. On his way back home he gets paranoid and gets into trouble with the police, but Clarisse helps him out. He confides in her about the books and gives her one of the books. At home he starts reading, but the next morning his wife finds the book and gets really furious at Montag. As he can’t convince her to keep quiet about it and help him, Montag takes the book back to the Fire Brigade and burn it. But too late! Montag has entered a new world and doesn’t want to leave. He starts stealing books on every deployment and stashes them at home.

One night Montag wakes up and sees Clarisse’s house being burned down. Someone found the book he gave to her. Now, Clarisse and her parents are on the run and of course Montag feels guilty for this. He seeks out Clarisse’s uncle, Faber, who was known for being a rebel a long time ago. With Montag being a Fire Officer, he doesn’t want to talk with Montag, but he forces Faber to take the books he salvaged and stashed away. A fragile bond forms between those two men. Montag has changed, his love for books, changed his way of looking at his job. At the next deployment the crew arrives at Montag’s home: Millie turned him in and now Captain Beatty forces Montag to burn down his own home. Beatty also knows about Faber and in an act of sheer hate, Montag kills Captain Beatty with his flamethrower. 

He can warn Faber to flee before the police arrive and the two men, now most wanted criminals, meet at an old abandoned warehouse. Soon the police have them surrounded and a heavy siege starts, Montag can flee, but Faber dies in the hail of bullets. The police is so desperate to find Montag as fast as possible, because the whole world is watching them via live TV, that they stage his death and kill some random homeless man.

Montag is free! He follows the river, just as Faber told him, and finds a group of people living in the mountains, outcasts just like him. There he find Clarisse and her parents among those people, who memorize books to save them from being destroyed. 

While they travel further away from the city, the city gets nuked and totally destroyed.

Observations:

The Dilemma: What I really liked about the script was the chouice presented to Montag. His future at the Fire Brigade looks really bright, he has a nice home, but still something keeps nagging at him. The decision to take that book and read for the first time, has so much weight, it such a profound moment with consequences Montag couldn't have imagined. But it is his decision to take that book! The characters grows immensely in this moment, because he isn't thrown into the world of the second act, but decides to take that step himself.

The Project:

In 1966 Truffaut filmed a adaptation of the Ray Bradbury novel of the same name.

The plans for a remake started in 1997 with Mel Gibson wanting to produce, star and/or direct the new adaptation/remake. Tom Cruise and Brad Pitt were rumored to play the lead role. In 2001 Frank Darabont revived the project (this his script!) with Tom Hanks in the lead role. In 2008 Hanks left the project and since then nothing new happened. If this will ever get made depends on finding a star for the lead role of Guy Montag. (Source: Wikipedia)

So, as always I encourage you to comment on my post, just choose 'Post as Anonymous', if you don't want to register first. Looking forward to your critism...

Have a nice day,

Tristan

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TOTEM - A Short Script by Tristan Mahlow

Finally I can post one of my own short scripts. I worked on this since February 2011, since I read Freud's TOTEM AND TABOO, which directly inspired me to write this short. I wrote several drafts, now the project is ready for the public. I am looking forward to your comments, please write your critique down below in the comments section.

I proudly present to you:

TOTEM

by TRISTAN MAHLOW

 

FADE IN:

EXT. FOREST - DAY - FOGGY

Wafting, grey fog between grey trees, like all the colours washed out of this bleak world.

A wolf's cry cuts through the errie silence.

UlARU, 16, emerges out of the grey mass. He only wears a loin cloth, revealing his scrawny body. On his back he wears a reed basket. Ularu is looking for something --

-- and suddenly his eyes grow very big: Far up in a tree: A SHINING RED APPLE! 

Ularu grabs the lowest branch and begins his climb. He pants and sweats when he reaches the apple. The boy picks the shiny apple like the most wonderful treasure and puts it in his basket.

CUT TO:

EXT. THE VILLAGE - DAY - FOGGY

Ularu runs back to his village, the few tents flocked together on a meadow, still glowing from his find. 

More tribesmen, young and old - and all of them as scrawny as Ularu - have returned with baskets and are now emptying them in front of the biggest tent. 

Their baskets are nearly empty and only a few roots and nuts come out of them. 

Ularu takes a look into his basket. It is still there: the apple glows in the dark of his basket. 

Ularu sighs and then comes to a decision: He takes out the apple and dissappears behind one of the tents, leaving behind his basket.

CUT TO:

EXT. A POND IN THE FOREST - DAY - FOGGY

The red apple pressed close to his body, Ularu runs to ALKINA, the most beautiful girl of his village. 16 and very innocent, she sits in front of a pond, washing clothes.

She jumps up, when Ularu reaches her. They both stare at each other for a moment: Alkina unsure what he wants, Ularu unsure what to do. 

Without a word and in a very sudden movement Ularu extends his arm. Alkina is startled and steps back. Then Ularu opens his hand and shows her the marvellous fruit. Her eyes open with amazment, she can not believe it! 

She reaches out to take it --

-- and a bony, wrinkled hand grabs the wrist of Ularu and the apple falls into the pond. 

KONOL, the old shaman of the village towers over Ularu. In his gaze burns anger. Without letting go of Ularu's wrist Konol fishes for the fruit. 

He catches the apple and then examines it for a little while. Konol turns, and draging Ularu along, the shaman returns to the center of the village.

CUT TO:

EXT. THE VILLAGE - DAY - FOGGY

Konol stops in the middle of the huts. He carefully places the apple down on the ground and starts rocking forth and back. The villagers gather around, wondering and staring at the old shaman.

The sage starts humming, getting louder and louder, chanting, breathing heavily, until --

-- THE GROUND RIPS OPEN, swallowing the apple. Ularu screams: his apple! Lost! 

A low rumble starts beneath the crowd of people, they look terrified. 

-- a tree grows, where the apple was: more like a full grown tree being pushed out of the ground. The tree is in full blossom and illuminates everything around it. The native people stare at the wonder happening in front of them. 

-- out of the massive trunk a figure appears: the TOTEM. A muscular men; his face has the astute traits of a wolf and his sheer strength radiates around him.

The tribesmen take a step back out of respect, some even bow down. With one movement of the Totem's hand, the fog disappears, with a wave of the other hand the dead forest, sourrounding the village, returns back to life, bearing food in abundance. 

Ularu looks at his own hands: why doesn't he have such powers?

His eyes, now mere slits, look at the Totem with envy and anger. The Totem looks at the crowd before him, then singles out Ularu. Both share an intense look.

The Totem raises his hand once again and --

-- points at Ularu!

The whole village turns and looks at the shocked boy. The Totem moves his hands: "Follow me!" and disappears into the forest.

The boy regains his composure and follows him --

-- Ularu doesn't see the worried eyes of Alkina behind his back.

CUT TO:

EXT. FOREST - DAY

The Totem wanders through the forest. Under his step, plants grow, blossom and die again. Ularu always behind him.

The Totem stops and turns around: he looks at Ularu. There is anger in his face. Before the Totem can do anything, Ularu jumps at him.

THEY FIGHT!

Ularu fights with a desperate strength, while the muscular and build Totem moves elegantly, avoiding Ularu's attacks.

Only the BLOODLUST in Ularu's eyes frighten the TOTEM and when the scrawny boy manages to put his meager hands around the throat of the Totem --

-- the demi-god resign. He just stops, looking at the rising moon above him. He could kill Ularu in an instant, but choose not to do so. The Totem's eyes are turned to sky, expecting something and Ularu presses harder and harder until the Totem falls to the ground --

CUT TO:

EXT. THE VILLAGE - SUNSET

-- The shaman, sits inbetween the villagers under their new shining tree. Suddenly: the TREE BURSTS INTO FLAMES. Ashes rain down on the people and Konol screams on the top of his lungs --

CUT TO:

EXT. FOREST - SUNSET

-- Ularu cowers over the corpse of the Totem, his mouth is covered in blood. There is a deep wound in the chest of Totem where is heart used to be. 

Then the TRANSFORMATION begins: Ularu grows bigger, muscles grow everywhere and his face adopts the traits of a wolf. He is not the scrawny kid anymore, now he has a frightening presence and his eyes radiate hate and determination. 

The new Totem runs off into the deep forest. The distant cry of a wolf can be heard under the bloodred moon.

CUT TO:

EXT. A POND IN THE FOREST - SUNRISE

Alkina goes to the pond, morning mist around her feet. She sits down (where she once sat with a boy named Ularu) and stares down into the water. She freezes: --

-- is there a face in the water? With her face closer to the surface she can see: the new Totem! 

Alkina jumps back in fear. Just below the water surface Ularus' face looks back at her, his eyes glimmer. He stretches out his hand (lacking the apple this time) and offers it to Alkina. She hesitates, then --

-- extends her arm, too. The two hands meet on the still water surface and behind Alkina the whole forest goes up in flames. Red, glimmering ash fills the air, as Ularu pulls down Alkina into his darkness.

FADE TO BLACK